Adults are scared of teens because society has given them a bad reputation.
Generalisations and stereotypes are damaging society because they are making a Self-fulfilling prophecy.
At one point all these people where teenagers as well so I don’t understand why people say that teens are yobs how would they like it if they were called yobs when they was our age.
Expectations from parents and teachers have an impact on the way you feel.This is a bad thing because it puts a downer on you it makes you feel blue they say stuff about us but if we said stuff about them they would not like it but at the same time it would still be putting a bad reputation on teens.
April 13, 2015 at 9:55 am
This is a good start – when I read your paragraphs, I can see your ideas and how these work to develop your arguments. It is clear that these are your own views and you have tried to use some interesting vocabulary and persuasive devices.
Targets
1) you must separate your sentences with full stops.
2) look at your spelling, specifically homophones (words that sound the same but are spelled differently). Learn the difference between where and were.
3) this is only 123 words – you have 670 to go. Which ideas will you develop? Why? One thing that stands out to me is that each of your starting sentences for paragraphs could be developed further.
April 14, 2015 at 11:42 am
Thanks you loads Albert this work is amazing
April 28, 2015 at 11:56 am
Thank you sir you are to kind
May 6, 2015 at 8:58 pm
Hello Albert
In order to achieve your perfect paragraph you need to fix some grammatical errors. Such as
“I don’t understand why people say that teens are yobs how would they like it if they were called yobs when they was our age.”
Can you spot the mistake?
You also need to use a range of sentence structures and sophisticated punctuation such as a semi-colon. I will provide extra help in the after school session.